No Fool 4 Luv

It almost sounds like you're just writing because someone told you to.

I...don't have anything new to say. For once. I echo STRONGLY the people who've posted previously; listen to what they have to say.

This was ok. I did not love this or in your words Luv it. LOL. Sorry.

Anyway, Ithink there was really no point to this. It was not bad, but it was not good. I have mixed feelings about this.

Good Luck.

-- M.B.Author

...Please scrap this. There's no meaning to an objective reader, there's no pleasing structure or word choice, and absolutely nothing original about it. Also: in your title, SPELL THINGS CORRECTLY. And do not--I repeat, do not use chatspeak like "4/for." No experienced (read: good) writer will take you seriously if you do.

I understand you're thirteen, but my cousin's only nine and he writes better poetry than this. Good luck.

Remember: spellcheck is your friend. Also, the title sucks. I realize that this might be symbolic of the idiocy of the teenage years, but I think you're over-doing it there.

I kept on expecting some ironic twist at the end, because the two narrators of the poem were so silly that it seemed impossible that there was no ironic twist. So the ending didn't really do it for me. Exaggerate it more for a better effect.

...and if this wasn't meant to be an ironic poem... O_o

I moved this to "other poetry" because it is in verse.

So I'll also critique it like a poem. Navel gazing, boring, didn't express any emotion. Try writing about something more concrete. Don't tell us things. And from my experiences, poems written to people aren't much to read, either.

This had no feeling in it, no emotion. You're new to poetry? [if this was a poem?] Read more poetry, that will help.